Is there constructive criticism that would help this group? What might have been more clear? What part of the Presentation seemed the least polished?
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| Creative Non-Fiction writer H.D. Thoreau. |
Mady and Alex, I thought you guys did a very good job of drawing a few conclusions and then focusing on developing them as major impacts and takeaways. These authors are all so major that without a major focus on refined thesis particulars, the presentations can easily lapse into a list-of-facts type regurgitation and drawing conclusions and hammering them home helps avoid this. I would not overstate that you hammered them home tightly but you did draw some major conclusions that were helpful and effective. Bravo.
ReplyDeleteYou also had a little back and forth between the two of you that was encouraging. It gave the impression you had discussed things at least in some depth before giving the Presentation. You both concurred that HDT's impact on civil rights was profound and worth considering even in our day and age. I would have tied this more to the current situation: would Thoreau agree on our current lockdown? Did we vote for it? Would he think it an overstep of authority that we did not? One of the reasons we don't know much about these authors is they require radical rethinking of things we are quite lazy about, such as knowing and defending the Constitution? Quick, tell me what does the First Amendment cover and why should we be discussing it today? That might have been a good idea for a conclusion to Thoreau to tie it to our modern culture and some of the same ongoing dilemmas that both Thoreau and we the people still face?
Food for thought-- and appreciate all your work, all of you!
From Ian
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I think you guys did a great job giving us information and telling us about his work. I cant think of anything that you could have improved on. It’s hard to do these presentations online. Nice work
Excellent job presenting during the chaos of discovering how to online! I cannot think of anything to critique, I honestly thought you guys did a great job keeping the presentation intriguing while online!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this presentation! I enjoyed learning about his background life like about his family, where he grew up, and went to school. The piece of constructive criticism I would offer is I would not read word for word as was done on some of the topics because we weren’t able to read it ourselves. All very interesting information however!
ReplyDeleteI think you guys did a great job as far as giving us a little picture of what HDT was passionate about and what made him tick. For constructive criticism I would have liked to have heard a little bit more about the writing style and subject matter of his works.
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Once again, a really nice job! It was very informative and thorough which I appreciated a
lot...what I loved about Thoreau is his lasting impacting of nature and social justice and how
that's carried on into future works. Good job guys!
From Lindsey,
ReplyDeleteI could not get these to post as a comment on the original post, so I am posting them here.
I really enjoyed this presentation and thought both Alex and Maddy did a good job of organizing when each other would speak. I do agree with Dylan though in that I wish you would have touched more on Henry David Thoreau's writing style and his subject matter than just his life. But I did like that you talked about his impact not only on writing, but on politics, and activism as well.
I enjoyed that you guys talked about major ideas that you thought were present in Thoreau's writing. I agree with everyone else who said that more style would have helped the presentation. I think if you included an example of his work you could have talked about both of these things, but still really nice work.
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